"Morgans" wrote in message
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"Danny Deger" wrote

Here is the start of my book on my life as a fighter pilot, engineer,
astronaut instructor, and involuntary lockup in a psych ward. Tell me
what you think.

First, try to take this all as my attempt at constructive criticisim, and
not flaming, in any way.

Be carefull, that your writing is not so "lingo correct" that the only
ones that can read it are people that are in the field. That would limit
your audience, quite a bit. g

Thanks for the feedback, I agree. It turns out this opening sequence is
full of lingo, but I find the next several pages slacking off a lot. I
think this might be OK in the long run. Time will tell.

My goal was and is a strong opening followed by a story told at a more
modest pace.

Danny Deger

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